Adored the format of that story, clever usage of the common twine options.
For nitpicky critcism, I felt like the knight became way too trusting of Jeanne too quickly, but I empathize that fluffing up the painful to write parts, even for the sake of pacing, is hard. Similarly, the knight accepted the identity of their soul surprisingly quickly. I'd expected a bit more resistance, bit more denial. Not that that couldn't be fixed - maybe a quick lore sentence that mentioned that the mental image of souls is really that big a deal and that's why they didn't struggle to accept it so instantly.
The rest though... Oh boy. It feels very... primal, very heartfelt. Like that's just how it came out of the author's hands, and it was naturally good.
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Very Cute, such a great read, my only complaint is that it ends :( <3<3<3
very good
It put some of my thoughts into words, that i haven't been able to do myself, made me cry, i loved it
Thank you for this
Wonderful story
This was a really great story! ^^
Really Loved this game and I like how you never hear Alice's Dead name or description of her before the change.
The description of dysphoria really hit home, wow. A truly beautiful story, it gives me hope regarding my own transition.
Adored the format of that story, clever usage of the common twine options.
For nitpicky critcism, I felt like the knight became way too trusting of Jeanne too quickly, but I empathize that fluffing up the painful to write parts, even for the sake of pacing, is hard.
Similarly, the knight accepted the identity of their soul surprisingly quickly. I'd expected a bit more resistance, bit more denial. Not that that couldn't be fixed - maybe a quick lore sentence that mentioned that the mental image of souls is really that big a deal and that's why they didn't struggle to accept it so instantly.
The rest though... Oh boy. It feels very... primal, very heartfelt. Like that's just how it came out of the author's hands, and it was naturally good.
the NSFW passage was cute <3.
This is touching :")
This was REALLY good! <3
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This was adorable thank you